One Hundred Percent Wool
by matthewmousekewitz
He calls himself a writer.
His cleverness conceals him from sheep.
A phobia deep
Seated in the color of
waves on cloudless days.
He hushes and instructs others
with an arrogant pomp.
Burdened by skinny sleep for the week (weak).
Hungry for chili, sourdough, and something else,
So I fed him “The sun rises in the yeast”
Something so suspiciously spice
That he eats and eats and repeats the process.
He paints himself in green
patches his bleeding red heart
with brilliant blue band-aids
Immune to the pull away.
Is completely battle weary,
But perseveres because
All bandages must come off someday
and hearts with scars still beat the same.
I think the last stanza could use a break after the indent. Also, try intermingling the sounds in the seventh line (“skinny weak from the week’s sleep”?) and try to adhere to your capitalization (they’re mostly capital except for the second indent, which I liked stylistically.) Make it uniform!
Dat last line.